Double Page Spread - Almost Finished

New Double Page Spread Photo Test

This is the re-creation of The White Stripes photograph that I designed in my drawn mock DPS. This is just a test shot, I will use the proper models for the final DPS. I used a VGA cable to connect the camera to the television so I could see the camera picture live on the television screen which was positioned directly infront of me.
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Cover - Almost Finished

What I need to work on

Front Cover

• "Electriff Have Returned" needs to be in middle of page
• Fill the white empty spaces
• Add price under title
• Make main photo seem more real, not cut out
• Add QR code

Double Page Spread

• Don't colour in eyes
• Change image to other design shown in drawings [Click Here]
• More red needed for consistant colour scheme
• Make picture overlap title
• Text needs to be in columns
• More interesting font
• Reference author

Contents

• More brief sentences
• More content - "Gig Guide/Reviews/Latest/News ETC"
• Needs to show magazine has at least 80 pages
• More branding
• Heading must say "contents"
• Sectioned better; columns as well as rows
• Image of crowd needs to be more exiting
• Make image of guitar + plectrum more interesting

Overall Magazine

• Variety of shot distances
• More content/objects/setting
• Include page numbers, date
• Mise-en-Scene needs much more thought
• Consistand heading typography
• Logo present on every page
• Look at Q magazine

Teacher Feedback - Mr Nicolle

Teacher Feedback - Mr Smith

Magazine title: BREAKDOWN – Luke Niblett

	Minimal  Level 1 10 – 23 marks	Basic Level 2 24–35 marks	Proficiency Level 3            36–47 marks	Excellence Level 4            48–60 marks
framing a shot, including and excluding elements as appropriate		Photo’s fine but not sure about DPS image
using a variety of shot distances as appropriate		Variety of distance used but guitar and plectrum don’t add much
shooting material appropriate to the task set		Contents photos are weak, crowd image is odd as the faces seen look incredibly bored. DPS needs different photo
selecting mise-en-scène including colour, figure, lighting, objects and setting		Main image too well lit and seems stuck onto cover
manipulating photographs as appropriate to the context for presentation, including cropping and resizing	Don't colour in eyes, doesn’t add anything
accurately using language and register		Contents is too wordy, DPS article is good if too short
appropriately integrating illustration and text		Everything is legible but very ‘safe’
showing understanding of conventions of layout and page design	No evidence of columns, only THREE things in whole mag, no page no’s, no branding. No grab lines, no fluff etc
showing awareness of the need for variety in fonts and text size	Little to no variety
using ICT appropriately for the task set		Ok

Summary Comment Luke: this doesn’t ‘look’ or feel like a magazine because neither the contents nor the DPS follow any of the conventions. Use columns, use page numbers, use logo/website on page corners for branding. Why is the name of the magazine on the contents page? Why aren’t your contents broken down into categories? Why is you magazine 14 pages long? How much does it cost? Your article MUST be longer. Look at Q magazines and see how they are laid out. You have a lot of work to do (most of it simple basic tweaks) to get this looking like a magazine. You also need to take more photographs.

Peer Feedback

1. Include issue number + price
2. More info of content on cover of various topics
3. More pages on contents page, (Page 30, 31, 32 ETC)
4. Good grammar
5. Interesting context
6. Double page spread needs to be in columns
7. Eye colours aren't realistic